Talk:Gorea

Page Improvement?

I'm not sure what exactly needs improving. I've referenced the page and put up the logbook material. What's the issue? IU 20:58, 19 October 2011 (UTC)

It's still a little walkthroughy in the section covering the battles. You can say how it is defeated, however it should be written in an in-universe style (i.e. not saying things like "The player through scanning will learn that there is a weak spot in the shoulders of the being"). For a good example of how a battle section should be written, see Flaaghra. MK 21:14, 19 October 2011 (UTC)

Also, while somewhat unrelated, there's probably some places where the grammar may be correct, but not the best option for relaying that particular piece of info. Bop1996 _{(Talk | Unfinished projects)} 21:17, 19 October 2011 (UTC)